7 comments to “Because of you”

  1. Lauri says:

    I’m sorry for the computer accident. Machines are so important but so frustrating too.

    I like the way the story is going. it brought out a lot of questions that pull the reader in. Nice that you’re letting the dialogue bring the story out. Scary this vampire stuff…

    Lauri says It Only Takes One Person

  2. texasblu says:

    You know, sometimes it’s a merciful thing, not a tragedy to loose our previous words, because as good as they were, I think we come up with better stuff. This is good stuff. :)

  3. Selma says:

    I always think the mark of a good piece of writing is whether the reader wants to read more. And I do. I do love this genre of fiction and I really like how you have set up that point of conflict that between Larius and Alia which will perhaps turn into something from which neither of them can recover.

    I like how you ended it with her taking his hand and looking out to the crystal towers, saying nothing. Unspoken emotion is a powerful tool. You are doing really well. Best wishes for the rest!

    Selma says Stark Cruelty

  4. Kayt says:

    This is quite compelling. The characters seem to have good depth, even in this single scene – I love vampire lore and this makes me want to read more. Hope the writing continues to go well, and the computer cooperates!

  5. Mrs. F says:

    I probably would have thrown my computer across the room if that happened to me. Seriously!

    Great story, it is very captivating. I hop ewe get the chance to read more and more of it!

    Mrs. F says Fantabulousness

  6. That must have been devastating but it does seem to have lead you to a good place. I’m really enjoying the story, they’re great characters.

    marmite and tea says New York, Baby!

  7. Glowstars says:

    Thanks guys for all the comments, you’re really encouraging me. Hopefully I’ll be a little more responsive when nano releases my soul!